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Comment on city gale (12 Aug 2011) by Magdalena Wiklund

Magdalena Wiklund — Wed, 12 Oct 2011 20:28:38 +0000

Sorry, I dont know why this happened, but the comment about more being there was ment for your other poem – death meets us.
Maggie

Comment on city gale (12 Aug 2011) by squashedmosquito

squashedmosquito — Wed, 12 Oct 2011 20:15:13 +0000

Thanks Magdalena. You’re right, there is more there, but it gets stuck because it starts turning into something overly emotional and thrashed. I remember clearly the low groan sound in my throat as I walked the street, and collapsing into my pain, while still being aware that no one around me would or could notice due to the incredibly bad and cold weather. Let me know if you see a pointer for a next verse… thanks for your helpful feedback. <3

Comment on city gale (12 Aug 2011) by Magdalena Wiklund

Magdalena Wiklund — Wed, 12 Oct 2011 20:09:52 +0000

Yes! A good one, but I feel that You can do much more of this poem. There is more into it, deeper….. try to see what you can do????
Keep it up, You are good.
Maggie

Comment on city gale (12 Aug 2011) by Magdalena Wiklund

Magdalena Wiklund — Wed, 12 Oct 2011 20:00:39 +0000

Great poem, not too complicated. This gave me some ideas. Thanks for letting me read, and keep it up! You are good!
Maggie

Comment on at night (10 Aug 2011) by squashedmosquito

squashedmosquito — Wed, 12 Oct 2011 19:38:48 +0000

Thanks for your lovely feedback <3

Comment on at night (10 Aug 2011) by zumpoems

zumpoems — Wed, 12 Oct 2011 19:34:32 +0000

Very nice and unrushed — very nice steady foundation for the conflict within.

Comment on contract (Aug 2011) by squashedmosquito

squashedmosquito — Tue, 11 Oct 2011 08:04:24 +0000

Thanks fatesjoke03.

Comment on contract (Aug 2011) by Fatesjoke03

Fatesjoke03 — Fri, 07 Oct 2011 03:19:35 +0000

Painful but so close to home. Great short piece.

Comment on uncertainty (13 March 2011) by This ain’t a story. . (part 2) « Where my thoughts wander

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Comment on black windows (28 June 2011) by Pomes

Pomes — Wed, 27 Jul 2011 17:32:44 +0000

great piece, the imagery was great.